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need critique on this thing I made.

on: September 18, 2017, 12:26:37 am

I made this based on a drawing I made, I made it with 2x2 pixels in mind.
I've started meddling with pixels because of terraria, but I'd like to go in a different direction.
Some things about it don't feel quite right yet, maybe a lot of them.
Main difficulties were shading on the teddy bear and its colour palette (?), but I don't mean to say that the ghastly thing coming out of it is perfect :P

P.S. my first post here, be gentle?
or don't, whatever

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Re: need critique on this thing I made.

Reply #1 on: September 18, 2017, 01:30:53 am
Hello Hunited, just to let you know. We know no mercy around here...Just kidding!

Let me try to help you a bit.

First let me tell you some positive things about your art.
-Your concept is nice, the creature is strange, menacing and sort of disgusting.
-The bubbles have some good and bold shapes

And some things I would make different:
-You lights are always near the edges of the forms, try to bring them inside the forms(If your light permits it)
-Your Little bear

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Re: need critique on this thing I made.

Reply #2 on: September 18, 2017, 01:56:22 am
Thanks Eduardo, hadn't really thought of that! I think that'll improve it. (Will post edit later)
Also, what exactly is wrong with the bear? I mean, not exactly, but you know... what exactly?

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Re: need critique on this thing I made.

Reply #3 on: September 18, 2017, 02:02:31 am
I could get behind this. I wouldn't stand in front of it because it scare the crap out of me, but I'd definitely get behind this.

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Re: need critique on this thing I made.

Reply #4 on: September 18, 2017, 01:49:30 pm
(Sorry about the last message, my browser went berserk and send it halfway through. Here's the finished one)

Hello Hunited, just to let you know. We know no mercy around here...Just kidding!

Let me try to help you a bit.

First let me tell you some positive things about your art.
-Your concept is nice, the creature is strange, menacing and sort of disgusting.
-The bubbles have some good and bold shapes.
-Your lines are carefully placed and you avoided banding for the most part.
-Nice details on all the goo stuff going upward.

And some things I would make different:
-You lights are always near the edges of the forms, try to bring them inside the forms(If your light permits it)
-Your Little bear's tones have no shift in hue, I would change it a bit between values.
-To make the creature more menacing i would pose it in a more ferocious way, bending forward in an arch.(I did one very quickly, i'll add it at the bottom)

Here's some notes:

Here's a slight paint over with just some color changes and light:

And here is how i would make the pose different(I did not have the time to remake it properly so i had to cut the ribs):


This is some pretty neat pixelwork, keep it up.

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Re: need critique on this thing I made.

Reply #5 on: September 18, 2017, 06:43:27 pm

Thoughts
I have to go, maybe I come back and type stuff here later.

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Re: need critique on this thing I made.

Reply #6 on: September 18, 2017, 11:04:58 pm
@yaomon17 , wow. That is definitely more intimidating. Love it. I'd still be standing behind it.

@Hunited , I agree with EduardoPras on the color change. It certainly makes the bear pop. Yaomon17's version too, but position-wise (if you were to animate it) your version's pose works better as a stationary frame.

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Re: need critique on this thing I made.

Reply #7 on: September 20, 2017, 10:19:03 am
First off, thank you for the edits, I feel like they really helped me identify my own mistakes. As for the pose, I was thinking about maybe animating this later so I think this is fine as for now.
I touched up on the skull a bit, thanks to yaomon17, you made me realise what felt off about my skull. Also redid shading in a few places and colours on the teddy bear.
Here's the edit:
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