Sci-fi scene with aero-bike and robots, need your estimate

[winged doom]

Hello, Pixelation, I need your fresh look.



What you think, can this work can be considered complete? Maybe there are not enough some details in this scene? Or it is necessary to shift the emphasis?

Here is also version with rider:



What version do you like more?

[DieMango]

My first thought was:

,,Where is the Hover-bike stored?'' its probable something like a tunnel to launch it or some sort of storage room but the energy barriers seem a bit misleading (seems weird to have energy walls in an area that isnt really sealed off)

Also the things that hold the Craft seem oddly out of place...deosnt give the feeling that the objects have in this room.

(Nitpick woud be that the Robot with the bird-like pose look very simple but it kinda fits...just the one-piece neck and static legs look not like something that woud move)

[winged doom]

but the energy barriers seem a bit misleading (seems weird to have energy walls in an area that isnt really sealed off)

These objects are part of current segment level-design, so I can't remove them.

Also the things that hold the Craft seem oddly out of place...deosnt give the feeling that the objects have in this room.

Is it better now?

just the one-piece neck and static legs look not like something that woud move

I'll try to disprove this, when I add a walking animation.

[DieMango]

Seems a liitle better but i think something to focus on:

I noticed that the placeholder is kinda like a clamp (there are 2 arms...the one you see in the front and the one that is in the shadow)

Maybe try to make it stand out like having some kind of bearing. Like a Clamp.
I think it distracted me because it looked like the arms squeezed the carft just onto a wall to hold it.

also maybe have the arms maybe on the same hight to make it look more like a machine that woud hold all kinds of things...just make one arms look like being longer because hydraulic stuff...(cant really discripe it but the things shoud be on the same plane and one just having the ,,Clamp'' extending)

And i am aware that the beam is a Game object but you coud move them away a bit so the one on the left doenst cut on the carft. Or move the carft a little into the middle...i know its a weird perspectiv wich make things like that akward but scene just seems weird because the craft isnt in the middle or exactly between the beams that seal that area for that craft.

Thats all i have...

[Decroded]

cool stuff 
cant edit but the "bird" robot looks a little unbalanced like it would fall forward.
i think it just needs the feet to be brought forward a bit, more in line with its shoulders for it it balance.

[Sersch]

it looks a bit dark to me overall, but maybe its not an issue in full screen?

[winged doom]

Like a Clamp.

I'm not really understand what you mean, can you show some example?

cool stuff 
cant edit but the "bird" robot looks a little unbalanced like it would fall forward.
i think it just needs the feet to be brought forward a bit, more in line with its shoulders for it it balance.

[MysteryMeat]

Not particularly! Instead of removing bits, try bending the legs forward a bit until they hit center mass! Here, I've done a bit of an edit:

I tried to showcase what I mean here (and in the process redesigned the legs a lil bit) but I didn't QUITE succeed in it.
Think about the mechanics of it, and if it would balance well on the single point without tipping forward or backwards. Usually, so long as the point touching the floor is in the very middle of where the weight would be distributed, it should be fine.


EDIT:
Metal Gear D has a similar design with regards to the legs and weight distribution!

[DieMango]

Like a Clamp.

I'm not really understand what you mean, can you show some example?

Kinda like this:


Just a quick edit....think about it like pads with claws...

[winged doom]

it looks a bit dark to me overall, but maybe its not an issue in full screen?

I agreed, but background is too much detailed, so I intentionally made it darker, to facilitate the perception of the main objects on screen. Here is the example what I mean:

I tried to showcase what I mean here (and in the process redesigned the legs a lil bit) but I didn't QUITE succeed in it.
Think about the mechanics of it, and if it would balance well on the single point without tipping forward or backwards. Usually, so long as the point touching the floor is in the very middle of where the weight would be distributed, it should be fine.

Hm, like this?

Kinda like this.

Oh now I see, thanks! I'll try it!


Also, I start work on new parts of this level:



What do you think, is it OK for perception? Or it's too much details for you?

Just in case, here is scaled version, http://i.imgur.com/L0wsKYI.png.