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[C+C] TiTLE!

on: December 24, 2016, 05:04:37 pm
experiments in "not give a fuck about the pallete"-iness  :D

stuff that i'm wonky about:
-composition
-the bird
-the mouth
critiques about other things are also accepted

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Re: [C+C] TiTLE!

Reply #1 on: December 24, 2016, 07:38:28 pm


Here's some slight modifications to the face. I think the mouth looked a bit off because of the bottom lip.  Also, I thought the ear looked a bit off as well, so I added a bit more hair. The forehead seemed to be too flat as well, so I tried to round it off with some shading.

Just some of my thoughts/changes!
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Re: [C+C] TiTLE!

Reply #2 on: December 24, 2016, 10:50:03 pm


And here's a 2nd version, with even more modifications (slight nose change, eyebrow change to go with the curvature of the eye, bird slightly different, a little bit more hair).

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Re: [C+C] TiTLE!

Reply #3 on: December 24, 2016, 11:20:32 pm
(Pre-warning, I'm not actually learned on composition, this is all stuff I picked up on my own and through eyeballing stuff)

Composition-ways, the piece feels a bit empty. There's a lot of blank space on the left and right, and there's not a whole lot to guide the eye around the picture.
The bird looks a bit on the smaller side, I woulda made it a bit larger and put it in profile so the wings would lead the line back to her face and the tail-feathers to the hand to create a sort of triangular "flow" between her head, body, and the bird.

That blank space in the left might be helped by something like bird silhouettes or clouds, perhaps, and the right side might be helped along by a cloud. I'd reccomend against buildings or trees personally though, since I think it would conflict with the image in a way I can't really put into words well enough.

The palette here I think is actually pretty good though, it gives it a nice pastel sorta look that sells the surreality of the picture a bit more than a more realistic one might.
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Re: [C+C] TiTLE!

Reply #4 on: December 25, 2016, 01:48:54 am
I disagree with MysteryMeat's issue with the composition. The blue is such a strong tone that I feel like its simplicity and openness serves the piece well, and its emptiness keeps the focus on her. Why disrupt it? Would you say the same for an open sky or sea?

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Re: [C+C] TiTLE!

Reply #5 on: December 25, 2016, 04:40:57 am
You raise a good point, like I said I base that stuff all on my sorta piecemeal art learnings.
It might be wise to add some clouds in the lower corner though, to better sell it on the sky. Or, if you want to jack up the surreality of it, a fish (koi fish maybe?) and some floating specks to imply it's underwater.
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Re: [C+C] TiTLE!

Reply #6 on: December 26, 2016, 03:32:58 am
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thanks for the edit! i like the first one more than the second one, though
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the triangularness is something to take note off, not adding much more elements to the piece, though, too distracting

edit:typos and reading comprehension i did not have when i posted
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Re: [C+C] TiTLE!

Reply #7 on: December 27, 2016, 12:07:27 am