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sans.

on: August 04, 2016, 02:36:00 am
I have made a drawing of sans. and I would like some critique please  ::).



Facts:

The image uses 18 colours.

(That is all I could think of)

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Thanks!

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Re: sans.

Reply #1 on: August 04, 2016, 05:06:21 am
He's tilting pretty far back, how is he not falling down?
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Re: sans.

Reply #2 on: August 04, 2016, 05:19:50 am
He's tilting pretty far back, how is he not falling down?

Michael Jackson's lean but backwards  lol ::)

just kidding, I hope it doesn't get me banned ><

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Re: sans.

Reply #3 on: August 04, 2016, 05:57:16 am
Fixed It!

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Re: sans.

Reply #4 on: August 04, 2016, 09:04:14 pm
Fixed It!


I think his feet and legs need a little more definition. I'm assuming he has slippers on and I can't really tell where they start with how light both the colors are, making it have the appearance that he has huge feet.

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Re: sans.

Reply #5 on: August 04, 2016, 09:53:45 pm
I'm assuming you mean this:

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Re: sans.

Reply #6 on: August 04, 2016, 10:16:50 pm
I'm assuming you mean this:


Exactly what I mean!

Another section where I can see a possible improvement would be on what appears to be the fur of the jacket.
This part:

At a smaller size, it's a bit harder to make out the wool from his teeth/face. Though it's possible, it's not very apparent right away. Perhaps if you added some shading into it, it'd help make it much more distinguishable.

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Re: sans.

Reply #7 on: August 04, 2016, 10:44:23 pm
I like how alive the character looks.

One thing I would point out would be the outline of the character. Typically you don't let pixels create 90 degree angles on an outline. This is hard to explain, easier to show.

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Re: sans.

Reply #8 on: August 09, 2016, 03:47:25 am
I'm assuming you mean this:


Exactly what I mean!

Another section where I can see a possible improvement would be on what appears to be the fur of the jacket.
This part:

At a smaller size, it's a bit harder to make out the wool from his teeth/face. Though it's possible, it's not very apparent right away. Perhaps if you added some shading into it, it'd help make it much more distinguishable.

Added the shading you suggested but I don't know if that helps:



I like how alive the character looks.

One thing I would point out would be the outline of the character. Typically you don't let pixels create 90-degree angles on an outline. This is hard to explain, easier to show.



Fixed the outline according to what you said, (Or at least what i think you meant).


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Re: sans.

Reply #9 on: August 10, 2016, 04:50:11 pm
Pushed!

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Re: sans.

Reply #10 on: August 10, 2016, 08:44:00 pm
Yes, that is precisely what I was talking about. That looks cleaner already.

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Re: sans.

Reply #11 on: August 13, 2016, 03:42:21 am
Is the drawing good enough yet?

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Re: sans.

Reply #12 on: August 13, 2016, 04:23:08 am
Is the drawing good enough yet?
That's the awful truth about art: it's never perfect

Yeah though, the contrast between coat fluff and face is still a bit close,  try using a very pale blue to divide them better.
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Re: sans.

Reply #13 on: August 14, 2016, 03:24:03 am
Hey friend! I did a quick draw over your original sprite.

I think the main thing you wanna focus on is the drawing itself of the sprite. Ignoring pixelart techniques altogether, your original drawing (as in the way you rendered the character using linework alone) is lacking a few things.

with a good drawing you mainly want to convey 3 things: the 3d form of the character, the gesture of the character's pose, and lastly the character's personality. Getting more form in your drawings comes from just doing life studies and getting the mileage in there. For gesture, you wanna start with a line of action (the orange line in my edit) which will usually just be a simple curve, then build the drawing around that line, as though the character's mass is resting on that line. As for the personality, i think you completely nailed that in your original version. The way his balance defies physics definitely suits the nature of the character, and you conveyed his relaxed, lazy persona really well!

once you've got the drawing solid, then you can start adding shading and technique to make it all polished and nice


hope that was helpful!

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Re: sans.

Reply #14 on: August 14, 2016, 05:22:40 pm
Hey, friend! I did a quick draw over your original sprite.

I think the main thing you wanna focus on is the drawing itself of the sprite. Ignoring pixel art techniques altogether, your original drawing (as in the way you rendered the character using linework alone) is lacking a few things.

with a good drawing, you mainly want to convey 3 things: the 3d form of the character, the gesture of the character's pose, and lastly the character's personality. Getting more form in your drawings comes from just doing life studies and getting the mileage in there. For gesture, you wanna start with a line of action (the orange line in my edit) which will usually just be a simple curve, then build the drawing around that line, as though the character's mass is resting on that line. As for the personality, I think you completely nailed that in your original version. The way his balance defies physics definitely suits the nature of the character, and you conveyed his relaxed, lazy persona really well!

once you've got the drawing solid, then you can start adding shading and technique to make it all polished and nice


hope that was helpful!

Of course, it was :)

As for the personality, I think you completely nailed that in your original version. The way his balance defies physics definitely suits the nature of the character, and you conveyed his relaxed, lazy persona really well!

Well, that was completely unintentional.  :blind:

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Re: sans.

Reply #15 on: August 14, 2016, 07:02:42 pm
I wouldn't say that, it seems like you liked the character and the game he's from a lot, and you conveyed that feeling well with your art. I would honestly consider getting feeling into art one of the hardest things to do, and its something a lot of artists lose track of in the race to develop technique. Techniques are important, but they have to be built around a solid emotional core, which your original drawing definitely has!