A couple quick notes:
If you edit your piece, consider posting the edited version along the originally posted. If we have a point of reference of what you changed we can get a better idea of where we could start helping you.
Secondly, don't feel forsaken if noone replies to a post. People are busy, and they invest their free time to help, as was already pointed out in the other thread. Go to sleep, and come back to your drawing a day or more later, look at it with a fresh view, and maybe you will recognize problems yourself.
Thirdly, right now it sounds very much like you're begging for replies and help. you're better than that. Your art, while still being rather novice, is far from bad. Right now it is difficult for me at least to give adive because you seem to be aware of the basic fundamentals and you try to implement them, but just not quite. Nothing that i'd personally could help you with but that you'd just have to overcome with practice.
Fourthly (sounds weird innit)
the icons are pretty cool. some of them are hard to read, and i wasnt able to identify them without checking their parents.
Try to work on visual clarity in that regard.
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Another important point:
I ignored some of the suggestions that you guys gave me, and that was a huge mistake. I'll stop doing that. If you guys give me any critique from now on, I'll completely follow them.
No, dont do that. never blindly follow critique. Read the critique, try to understand it. Why was it given, how does it change, improve or worsen your ideal picture. See if the critique qualifies to your criteria.
The laziest way out often is something along the lines of "thats just my style", without any consideration or even understanding of what that style even is or why it was deliberately chosen. People here don't like to hear that, so if you argue against a critique, put some thought into it. not just for the sake of the one giving critiques, but also for yourself to understand your own art better.
