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Update + Playing with techniques

on: September 27, 2006, 03:20:59 am
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Re: mee??

Reply #1 on: September 27, 2006, 04:29:59 am
yeah, I thought of that peice by Josh Astorian when I first saw this.

Some things:

The light shades on the hair are too prominent and distinct, I'd tone that down a little.

Your pixeled face overall isn't round enough, most notably the cheeks.  The chin and forehead too.  Bring the shades in further

The nose looks really bumpy.  Flatter shading here with a sharper change in shading at the tip of the nose would work better, I think.

The face looks too long, shorten it a few pixels?

I'm confused about the reverse selout on your left ear.  having the darker purple right next to the shades of your ear without buffering looks out of place and choppy.

That's all for now

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Re: mee??

Reply #2 on: September 27, 2006, 04:41:12 am
I agree with darien's crits, but so far I think it looks excellent.  the chin looks like it pokes in way too far though.  anyway, good luck with it.

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Re: mee??

Reply #3 on: September 27, 2006, 06:11:26 am
I helped crit this while it was being made.
So most of the things I saw wrong with it were corrected. <3
can't wait to see final.

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Reply #4 on: September 27, 2006, 11:41:19 am
The darkness around the neck and adams apple is too severe, as though the neck and head are completely seperate and simply smushed together. Also, Accentuate the angle more. I notice you've done the nose as if the light were coming from above it, whilest in the picture, the top of the nose is darker due to the lighting. When I say top, I dont mean like the bridge of the nose and above, I mean everything north of where the underside of the nose takes a turn.

Use some highlights. Directly under the nose to the lips, the edges of your cheeks near the mouth, following the lines coming from the sides of the nostrils, where the underside of the nose turns upwards, above the nose, and in the crease of your forhead(because really, its far too empty in the protrait. Theres stuff going on in the pictures forhead, but youve neglected stuff like that character adding crease.)

Good job. :)
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Re: mee??

Reply #5 on: September 27, 2006, 12:35:32 pm

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Re: mee??

Reply #6 on: September 27, 2006, 01:07:01 pm
At the moment, what I think it ruins the picture is how you use all the tones for the shading, using them gradually from darker to lighter.
I guess, you can improve it by wisely picking the shadow colors and if anything AA.
Also your eyebrows (from what I saw on the reference) are more straight, and your nostrils are a bit thicker.
And yeah dont forget to shade where the adam's apple is supposed to be, at the moment in yours looks like there are two holes right under your chin.

Edit: Typo edit :X
« Last Edit: September 27, 2006, 01:35:58 pm by Panda »

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Re: mee??

Reply #7 on: September 27, 2006, 01:33:50 pm
Your ears are also a bit bigger  :D

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Re: mee??

Reply #8 on: September 27, 2006, 03:23:14 pm
Nice work flaber! I like it! I got a few crits though. In my opion there could be some more darker tones under the chin because if you look at the photo there is a larger and darker shadow caused. Also personally i would make the neck slightly darker so the adams apple would stick out a bit more. I love the portrait! Good work.

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Re: Update + Playing with techniques

Reply #9 on: October 29, 2006, 01:10:25 am
ok - so big change to last time
basically redid the whole thing

here it is - with 3 diff backgrounds (couldnt decide which i liked best)

(originally created in lightest background)

played with a bit of texturing and blending
played abit with colours
experimented with several different things

tried to get more form/flow developed by dithering in such a way that somewhat resembles pencil strokes, flowing to fit the surface

wanted to use the wasted space in solid colour areas - created similar shade in different hue to add extra texture, detail, blendin, etc

played abit with hue variation (im no good at it, ohwell)

experimented with using cooler colours in shadows, and slightly warmer in light areas

this was a learning / experimenting project for me
i think it did its job

15 colours
not sure if i should add more to the hair or not

what do you think?


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