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Dojo WIP

on: April 15, 2016, 05:59:06 pm


Heya,

I'm not done with the side of the roof but I'd like to know how I can improve the inside. Especially the area between the two doors which I'm not happy with. I think the roof looks pretty good.

Thank you!

Z.

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Re: Dojo WIP

Reply #1 on: April 16, 2016, 12:00:33 am
Most obvious thing is the wall is too bright and the lines are too dark.
This much contrast competes for attention with the sprite layer so inspect ur values and contain them according to their depth and priority.

Likewise while i understand the style reference of using outlines on the clouds, the lines seem too dark plus there is a sudden hue shift which creates too much contrast.

I also think the grid on the wall can be enlarged a bit.
The reason is its causing a bit too much detail imo which again competes for attention.

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Re: Dojo WIP

Reply #2 on: April 18, 2016, 12:32:07 am
Thanks, Decroded.

New version, I think I've fixed most of the things you've mentioned:



I think it's quite an improvement but I'm not quite there yet. What do you think?

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Re: Dojo WIP

Reply #3 on: April 18, 2016, 01:19:40 am
On the right track to my eyes.

The background view through the gap still seems to have to much contrast and saturation so try adjusting the levels to be more constrained rather than sharing values with foreground layers.


I like that you're adding more interesting details.
I don't think objects like the lamps deserve black outlines if they aren't interactive, and even if they are the lines inside the lamp are way too strong so try lightening (a lot) the lines as they get closer to the middle to soften it and show the light bleeding.

It looks like the characters could be moved down to the centre of the platform so they could move past objects like the sword stand.
Currently they seem to hug the wall a little.

I think some wooden structural beams every so often would look good and provide an opportunity to add shadow and depth.

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Re: Dojo WIP

Reply #4 on: April 20, 2016, 06:29:51 pm
Thanks, Decroded!

I've fixed everything you've mentioned:

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Re: Dojo WIP

Reply #5 on: April 20, 2016, 09:12:10 pm
I feel like everything is fighting for attention. There's no global light it seems and there's no local contrast (everything goes from really dark to really light). I've been looking at the image for a few minutes now and I've already got noticeable eye fatigue.

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Re: Dojo WIP

Reply #6 on: April 20, 2016, 10:02:56 pm
What's the solution?

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Re: Dojo WIP

Reply #7 on: April 20, 2016, 10:19:17 pm
Add global lighting, add local lighting, reduce local contrast. Quick little edit to try a few things out, needs a ton more work of course.