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[C+C]Wraith

on: August 10, 2015, 06:43:23 pm
Pretty quick spirte, no idea how to improve it.
« Last Edit: August 10, 2015, 06:58:37 pm by Dnilb »

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Re: [C+C]Wraith

Reply #1 on: August 10, 2015, 08:34:15 pm
I'm not too sure about what I am going to write but
maybe a bit more contrast and maybe shortening the arm on the right
because it looks like it is going to the viewer
If that's not intentionally I would change it so you can't see the inner side on the right

But maybe I'm misinterpreting or wrong in general I don't know ^^

Edit: Forgot to mention: looks great!
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Re: [C+C]Wraith

Reply #2 on: August 10, 2015, 09:38:12 pm
Small improvements + first try of doing animation:

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Re: [C+C]Wraith

Reply #3 on: August 10, 2015, 11:06:46 pm
Sorry for taking so long on the response but i wasnt sure if there was anything wrong with it.  Technically the whole piece is sound with no real errors other than perhaps the bone structure of the arms and hands but youll just look up reference for that, RIGHT!  Other than that the main problem i found was just eh shape and idea of the wraith.  It looks (Sorry) a bit silly with the proportions of head being much bigger due to the fact that ths is an aspect used to make something look cute.  Something about the the animations that i noticed is the movements of the cloth.  Unless they are magical they should be moving the tails down when the wraith goes up and vice versa.  I did a really quick edit of the not moving one beforehand just to show you what i meant by giving it some purpose rather than just being there and looking almost purposeful.  Another thing that you could use a look at reference for is torn cloth, especially in old cloaks and the likes.  I found that on occasion they create small little loops but this effect can only be used extremely sparingly and not round loops but sharp loops.  :crazy:  Heres my shitty edit:
I dont get it done, but when i do its not done.

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Re: [C+C]Wraith

Reply #4 on: August 10, 2015, 11:41:23 pm
Last one for tonight
Update:

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Re: [C+C]Wraith

Reply #5 on: August 11, 2015, 12:05:03 am
Hmm I think the newer one looks a bit lifeless now
more like a sprite or something
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Re: [C+C]Wraith

Reply #6 on: August 11, 2015, 12:10:28 am
The arms are much to short in the second one.  The way they were portrayed in your new one they have 0 space for the upper arm they are just shoulders then fore-arms which makes no sense.  Also no offense good sir but the point of the back of the cowl looks like a certain racist groups inverted colour hat.  :-X  Use the one that i did more to make the next one tomorrow. (even though it is so rough) :crazy:
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Re: [C+C]Wraith

Reply #7 on: August 15, 2015, 05:41:53 pm
@Update
Remade into smaller sprite with diffrent shades color, trying to make sprites in this style for a game so I would appreciate any feedback on how to make it better.

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Re: [C+C]Wraith

Reply #8 on: August 16, 2015, 07:24:03 pm
Looks great but I think the arms look kinda weird
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Re: [C+C]Wraith

Reply #9 on: August 16, 2015, 08:32:55 pm
The first version was the best, had tension and shape.  All of the edits, yours and by others, were a step or two back.