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[WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

on: April 16, 2015, 12:46:38 am
Hi Pixelation!

This is my first time posting here. I started this a while ago, but I wanted some advice before advancing. Mostly on the anatomy and the perspective.
Any crits are very welcome. Thanks! ::)

 
« Last Edit: April 25, 2015, 06:42:45 pm by pavanz »

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Re: [WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

Reply #1 on: April 25, 2015, 06:46:41 pm
Update:


(sorry for the double post)

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Re: [WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

Reply #2 on: April 25, 2015, 07:17:33 pm
The stance feels a little off. The legs appear very stiff - perhaps add a bit more bend to the knees? The front foot also has a strange angle relative to the body. Since it looks like she would have stepped into that pose, bringing her foil up, the foot should point a little more outwards towards the direction she's facing and bringing her body to point. The foil itself looks a little odd - the guard seems to be at an incorrect angle for the direction of the blade. It looks like the blade is bending and off-centered where it's connected to the guard.

The breast also seems a little weird, in that it's parallel to the bottom of your canvas when the body itself is at an angle. I'd raise up the rear breast a little bit, perhaps.
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Re: [WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

Reply #3 on: April 27, 2015, 06:02:37 am
Thanks for the input! Tried to work on the things you pointed out:



Now I see how the previous pose looked weird.

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Re: [WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

Reply #4 on: April 27, 2015, 06:10:44 am
That looks a lot better! Nicely done. Everything looks quite a bit more natural now.
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Re: [WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

Reply #5 on: April 29, 2015, 11:50:40 pm
All right, done some minor tweaks and I think It's finished

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Re: [WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

Reply #6 on: April 30, 2015, 06:55:36 am
If her sword arm is so foreshortened that we can't see it at all, why is her sword so long in comparison? Right now, it looks like she was amputated, and had a weird nail thing grafted to her stub. The sickly green color palette isn't helping matters! :x
The pixeling is nice, but the perspective and anatomy are questionable. I'm not sure what her legs are doing under her dress, and her arm appears very long.
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Re: [WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

Reply #7 on: May 01, 2015, 01:09:26 am
Yeah, anatomy and perspective are aways a problem to me  :'(

Tried to fix it a little bit (and to explain the legs)

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Re: [WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

Reply #8 on: May 01, 2015, 04:13:13 am
Dunno, I'm still not convinced, hahah. I myself am terrible at anatomy, so I can't really help you, beyond saying something feels off to me. =(

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Re: [WIP][C+C] Feline fencer

Reply #9 on: May 01, 2015, 08:33:10 am
I always find that if I'm having anatomy problems, it's best to modify the pose with something classical (for example comic book artists have regular sets of poses they reuse). Maybe you could tackle the foreshortening by revealing more of the elbow?

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