Thanks for the helpful crits all

wzl:
Good thinking, new version:

Nirel, Decroded, Joe & HarveyDentMustDie:
Good points, here's another go with less head rotation and tweaked timing:

I want to keep the impression of eye contact too so I'll try another version with the raised chin Harvey and Decroded suggest. The double chest bump is charming but feels like it diminishes the testosterone overload situation he's got going there. With one bump, he's all tensed up and insane-looking. With two, he's more like a primate marking territory. Also a good fit, but not quite what I'm going for.