This year`s Secret Santa was a messy thing for me. As a result, I failed to finish my present in time (I showed part of it), but I ought to finish it at last through thick and thin. At one moment I realised I couldn`t come up with any way to make it better, and the picture, unfortunately, was faaaaaar from perfect.
Suddenly I got a couple of ideas just before posting here, but I`m going to ask advice nevertheless.
You may comment on everything you consider deserving mentioning, although I`ve decided to solve some general problems first, such as overall balance, composition, palette.
Here is the original version I had:

Version #2:

Version #3:
Made #2 & #3 in a minute, so they are super-rough, but I hope that`s enough to point out general problems. I think the balance is pretty nice in the 3rd one.
I don`t like the current palette. Some colours are pure waste.
May be this photo will help you to understand what perspective I`m going after.