Tree [WIP]

[wolfenoctis]

Hi guys, my first post here, I've been lurking these forums for a while now and decided to join and ask for advice to help me improve my pixel art. This is a tree I've been working on:



Thank you.

[Nmb910]

I don't really see a problem here. 

It is a little strange that the trunk of the tree isn't shaded despite being in a shadow.

[Mr. Fahrenheit]

Try to shade the tree as a whole rather then each individual cluster of leaves. Besides that it looks very nice. 

[PypeBros]

As farenheit said, defining an overall shape by high-level shading would help.

A quick edit for you: I introduced an "overlay" layer in gimp, and painted the volume with darkest green. Here's the result.

By the way, your "leaves chunk" look very much like pillow-shaded chunks rather than chunks facing a lightsource and casted shadow, imho.

[wolfenoctis]

Thanks for all the feedback, I tried applying them:




How's this?

[AzKai]

Wow that looks A LOT better to me, personally! The tree is starting to come together as a whole now!

I feel as if to me, the rows of leaves are a little too 'clean' and 'neat' to be a real tree. (IE: They are falling too perfectly in rows.) However; if that is the game's style (which it could very well be) than a style is a style!

[wolfenoctis]

Ok, I tried to make the leaves a little more defined and the rows less obvious...

[Mr. Fahrenheit]

It's looking very good now! The only thing I see is that your tree looks like a conifer but has leaves and not pines.    Anyways good job.

[PypeBros]

Imho, your first trunk with 3 shades was superior to the current one. You clearly did progress, and the "detailed leaves" bring just the right amount of detail. Yet, you imho took the "row less obvious" a little too far. It works well on the rightmost part of the tree, but on the leftmost one, you went with very irregular volumes, and somehow broke the perspective... That's a bit the Dr. Jektree and Mr. Hyde, this time.

quick edit with copy-pasting of vertical slices ...

[wolfenoctis]

I think I managed to fix it. Thanks again for taking the time to reply pypebros and mr fahrenheit 

[Mr. Fahrenheit]

Now that is an awesome tree. Good job!

[Sohei]

The original tree was way more interesting.

[Vakinox]

The original tree was way more interesting.

I agree. It had a more sense of reality and flaw as an actual tree, from my perspective.

The one here:



Seems to be the most flourishing design, so far.

Replace it with the trunk in the final image, and edit the center malformed bush on the tree top, and I'll think you'll have a fine tree.

[r1k]

I like that tree more too.  Its more interesting, even if the newest one is technically better.  Though the old one can be improved by applying the things you learned making the newer one.  Like paying attention to the overall form, removing the pillow shading, and making it less segmented.  Quick edit



I understand if you just want to move on though.  The new one is good, and you clearly learned something.

[wolfenoctis]

I understand if you just want to move on though.  The new one is good, and you clearly learned something.

Pretty much this, although your edit is rather interesting, I might revisit the original design in future.

Thanks for your comments