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Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

on: October 20, 2011, 10:35:03 pm
howdy all. would be obliged if you could share some critique on this piece before i get bored with it. top left is most recent, the others are just context of what it's been through. any suggestions & ideas welcome. thank ye.

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« Last Edit: October 26, 2011, 06:30:46 pm by 8bitty »

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Re: critique plz

Reply #1 on: October 20, 2011, 10:40:15 pm
desaturated tire tread and some flashy rims  :y:

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Re: critique plz

Reply #2 on: October 21, 2011, 03:22:26 am
wider car?

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Re: critique plz

Reply #3 on: October 21, 2011, 01:09:55 pm


hmmm. i think i prefered it when it was simpler. might tone it down, take it a few steps back... anyways thanks dudes.

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Re: critique plz

Reply #4 on: October 21, 2011, 04:34:27 pm

a slightly new direction.


i'm liking were this is going.

« Last Edit: October 21, 2011, 07:32:33 pm by 8bitty »

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Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #5 on: October 23, 2011, 10:21:13 pm
what kinda shading should i go for? i think the simpler kind looks better. ya gotta gimme feedback peeps.



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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #6 on: October 24, 2011, 03:20:26 am
Right would be more successful if they were all shaded as delicately as main guy, and had dark brown interior lines. Also bump up car contrast to match them, they don't fit their scenery.

Elongate the upper arm on the driver. Coming along nicely although I much preferred it when it was 1 blue guy or 1 naked man on car.

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #7 on: October 24, 2011, 03:12:11 pm
Machete man needs balls.
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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #8 on: October 24, 2011, 03:36:23 pm
He has a machete, he doesn't need balls

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #9 on: October 24, 2011, 05:38:21 pm


I much preferred it when it was 1 blue guy or 1 naked man on car.
How come? I thought it looked real boring. Anyways thanks for the feedback. :y:

Ptoing: Added a ball bag just for you dude.

Also reduced the size of his D, as it was resting on the driver's shoulder.

Need some help with the position/pose of the guy in the back tho. I tried taking him out but it kinda throws it off. Ideas?

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pretty much done with the guys i think. gotta fix the car now.
« Last Edit: October 24, 2011, 07:53:47 pm by 8bitty »

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #10 on: October 24, 2011, 08:16:21 pm
Yay.

I think the guys need more hair. Armpithair, chesthair on the standing duder. You know these guys would be hairy.

Dunno about dude in back. Perhaps you could put some huge soundsystem on the back? Massive speakers or something :D
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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #11 on: October 25, 2011, 02:58:31 am
I liked the single figure ones better because the group seemed to crowd the image too much but now that it's (back) to three it feels much better and more concentrated. So it's not boring and not cluttered now, good job. : D

Second the hair notion. Gun doesn't really fit with the machete or the rest of the image (except the car) in terms of style, so you may want to cartoon it up.

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #12 on: October 26, 2011, 06:29:31 pm

Bam. Dey hairy. Anything else irking people before I polish it up?

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #13 on: October 26, 2011, 06:56:36 pm
:crazy:

Man pointing the middle finger has the same face as the machete man. huh. Although I've started to become used to it by following it through all these stages and seeing it so many times. Transplant the face of the guy you deleted (in the back seat of the car) onto him maybe?
« Last Edit: October 26, 2011, 08:05:19 pm by pistachio »

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #14 on: October 26, 2011, 07:06:29 pm
If I may ask a question: why are they naked ? ^^
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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #15 on: October 26, 2011, 07:52:44 pm
Ty pistachio, something i'd forgotten.

If I may ask a question: why are they naked ? ^^

For lols.

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #16 on: November 02, 2011, 11:41:36 am


hey ppl. i'm pretty happy with how the animation turned out, but the guys look a little stiff, anyone got suggestions on that?

Seperately I made a shooting animation for the gun guy, and a steering one for the driver, this is just the main loop.

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #17 on: November 02, 2011, 12:08:21 pm
Why don't you animate the arms and the car aswell so it doesn't look like an animated carousel?

Maybe like this or so


Make his tits and dick jump and so on, fancy!
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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #18 on: November 02, 2011, 04:46:05 pm
Keep the smooth motion, but elk's edit shows what would move on the guys. I think the smooth is good, just make everything drag behind the movement a little so it has sway like in the edit. dont forget gun guy's bling! C:

Really nice though. hilarious lol. Wheels don't stay on the ground though? If the car is jumping it does need one bump to kinda jerk it up there and solidify that motion.

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #19 on: November 05, 2011, 08:55:43 am
i second elk's opinion. needs more bounce and waving dicks and such

i miss your stuff bitty!

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #20 on: November 06, 2011, 06:41:16 pm
I second Atnas.

The feel of naked gangstas carousel is fucking priceless, bobbing man-tits and genitals would add to it,  but making it normal low-low movement would just take away from the uniqueness.

Also, while the blue dude's level of  abstracion sort of looked like NERDS (candy) gangsta thus wasnt as good as this,  his caricatured expression WAS pretty cool. Maybe try out making their faces a bit caricatured (I see muppet noses and face features in my head) and exagerate their expressions a bit and see how you like that?

You know...these guys feel like they could be the opposing army in a Trucker's Delight game.

and here's a song that this gif brought up in my head
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OR7wYtsFIP0
« Last Edit: November 06, 2011, 06:51:32 pm by Conceit »

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Re: Cholo Gangstas (Nudity)

Reply #21 on: November 08, 2011, 09:11:57 am
This is so awesome. Also I second Atnas's sugestion.

And even though Regie Watts appears to be made out of nothing but pure awesome, I think this song might be more relevant.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wyx6JDQCslE
« Last Edit: November 08, 2011, 09:16:36 am by FreudianSlap »