AuthorTopic: GR#044 - Human Sprite in Perspective - Perspective, Anatomy  (Read 10648 times)

Offline Jad

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Re: Planning first!

Reply #10 on: March 29, 2011, 10:26:58 pm
Yeah, straighten out the hair in the middle and let it curl at the end, since the hair in the middle has to carry the most weight
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Re: Planning first!

Reply #11 on: March 29, 2011, 10:30:20 pm
Something like this? I dont know... Now it look like blood or something, imo...



I kinda prefer the old one.

Why not just change the way it folows the edge?

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Re: Planning first!

Reply #12 on: March 29, 2011, 11:12:06 pm
There's an infinite number of ways to arrange the composition, but it seems that you've only explored one of them.  The focal point is clear and vibrant, but everything else seems dull; the diagonal lines and figure draw the eye to the top right of the picture, but there is nothing there to hold interest.


Other possible compositions:

-View perpendicular to wall so that you can see the landscape behind it:
 http://lh3.ggpht.com/_F-ly0u0mezQ/SOCgAEe6dhI/AAAAAAAAE_k/jLD8KxfJnxU/top+of+castle+(Small).JPG
http://cache1.asset-cache.net/xc/98759657.jpg?v=1&c=IWSAsset&k=2&d=A7B69CF049AC9005D3CEBAE298AE0A8A8361E15733A2D3515F07F5DC6AE31502

-View looking up at wall:
http://thumbs.dreamstime.com/thumblarge_504/1274136240iI8dnQ.jpg

-Reducing figure size to improve atmosphere:
http://image40.webshots.com/41/2/56/13/2313256130082663307VsCeSp_fs.jpg

-From the side:
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3314/3444242524_afdafdf3df_z.jpg

-Other ideas:
http://www.mywedding.com/blog/wp-content/gallery/cuba-anna/bride-castle-wall-sitting-orange-wedding-dress.jpg
http://images.travelpod.com/users/agates515/1.1289204002.sitting-on-castle-wall-500-years-old.jpg
http://image06.webshots.com/6/2/35/85/161323585pnWsIS_fs.jpg


I think you need to try different angles out to find the most effective composition.

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Re: Planning first!

Reply #13 on: March 29, 2011, 11:53:29 pm
Well... But then I think it's too late to fix this one, isn't it?

Would you suggest something for the top right?

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Re: Planning first!

Reply #14 on: March 30, 2011, 03:54:52 am
It's looking good, you don't appear to be having the bit of block I'm having on my current pieces, though I think I just broke it on one of mine. I think the problem people are having with the hair is that as soon as it falls over the edge it becomes paper. It loses all definition. I also think the crennelations could stand to be a bit smaller. I'm not an expert on fortification but the size of those things seem a little over the top. I think them being smaller would also put a little more emphasis on the woman. Looking good though, nice shading on her.

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Re: Planning first!

Reply #15 on: March 30, 2011, 04:01:16 am
Thank you, Dwimori!  :)

I'm planing to detail a bit more those crennelations later.. And maybe redo if it will be needed.

Anyway, I change a bit more the hair.

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Re: Planning first!

Reply #16 on: March 30, 2011, 04:02:46 am
This reminds me of M.C.E
the perspective looks too constructive for me :o
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Re: Planning first!

Reply #17 on: March 30, 2011, 04:09:24 am
Aside from what everyone else said about composition and all that jazz, I note a lack of a foot--at least a right foot--and that her left arm looks a bit flat. I'll make an edit if you don't understand but I'm feeling a bit lazy at the moment.

Also, maybe you took Dwimori's advice too much. Now the hair looks unnaturally fluid somehow...

Whether or not you're going to redo it, you might want to take that into consideration.

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Re: Planning first!

Reply #18 on: March 30, 2011, 04:14:44 am
I would apreciate an edit, pistachio, but take your time! ^^
About the hair, I'm still trying to get it right... I just don't know how, yet. :-\

And thanks, Elk! Oh, and btw, what is MCE?

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Re: Planning first!

Reply #19 on: March 30, 2011, 04:30:33 am
M.C. Escher.
I think your edit of the hair was too extreme, and that's why it looked like blood, if it curled a bit at the ends as Jad suggested it might look alright. I think you should define that edge the hair sits on via a change in the darkness of the hair, rather than having those peachy lines. Compositionally, Mush makes a good point, in that the diagonal lead the eye away from the focal point rather than towards it, so having something in the top right to trap the eye and bring it back into the image is necessary.