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Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: Accident on January 15, 2009, 01:44:33 am

Title: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Accident on January 15, 2009, 01:44:33 am
There was going to be an amusing comment here. :D

I'm a newbie. Really. Here is Victoire. She is a waitress at an unnamed, unimportant bakery. She likes to steal the cakes when she thinks no one is looking.
Critique? I'd like to become a pixel artist one day, but I doubt it.

(http://img102.imageshack.us/img102/4418/victoire1yy1.gif)
Title: I have no dessert. . .
Post by: Euphronios on January 15, 2009, 02:54:00 pm
The palette is great; you've provided nice contrast.
Silhouette is solid and the character is very readable.
She's cute as a button.

I say STOP. Don't do anything else to this piece.
Unless you feel inclined to make her do one of those lithe Betty Boop dances.

Wonderful work
I'd like to see the next one with a full 4bit palette.
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Jad on January 15, 2009, 03:43:52 pm
What's with all the sadness? The topic symbol, 'unimportant', 'doubt it'.

<3 <3 <3 <3

Here, internet hearts for you, this is great!

I adore the character design, the gameboyish colours + red and the description of her : D.

From what I see here, you're clearly pixel artist material!

Going after the pallette and style you chose, I'd say you pretty much nailed it, there's not much more to do with this piece except for adding more colours or doing things that would change the piece.

For nitpicks though:

Personal preference of mine: I'd make the outline of her chin into one single connected line that's one single color O:

Her hands are a bit harder to read than the rest of her.

If you'd like to work around this piece some more, I'd love to see a background of the bakery where she works! That, or some animation of eating cake (:

Please do post more! And do not doubt your dream and your ability to become a pixel artist working pro! A pixel artist in general, you are already!
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Accident on January 15, 2009, 11:02:43 pm
Euphronios: Hope you like the minor edits I made though-- no major change to the design. =w= Thank youu.

Jad: You'd be sad too if she tried to steal your desserts. >:
Thank youuu~ >///>

I did what you suggested, and fixed both her hands and neck. Also, a bit of her hair.
(http://img57.imageshack.us/img57/1921/victoiremw4.png)
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Jad on January 16, 2009, 03:52:39 am
Haha, this is still completely adorable!

Now I have no issues left with this, so please proceed with something! I am totally digging your style so please stick around and post more! <3

I am still suggesting either a scene or an animation if you wanna expand on this one, otherwise make something new and nice!

Good work and a nice debut here at Pixelation!
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: abzdragon on January 16, 2009, 04:05:21 am
I have to pop in and say I love the style and palette on this. She is almost the color of a cupcake with all the sweetness (and I love cupcakes, shh). I can't wait to see more from you!
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Accident on January 16, 2009, 05:26:59 am
Thanksthanksthanks! owo

I tried animating. I must say, it's not my thing.

(http://img292.imageshack.us/img292/9375/lalalaed1.gif)
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Mathias on January 21, 2009, 02:46:55 pm
A newbie? I don't buy it. This sprite has a level of style that a newbie almost always lacks. The animation is fitting; good continuity. There are some animation critique points that jump out at me, but I think you're done with aren't you?
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: McClaneGames on January 21, 2009, 08:57:38 pm
I like the retro pallet, and I don't think that the animation is bad, but it would be nicer if the hearts didn't all disappear at once, but one-by-one.
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Accident on January 22, 2009, 05:40:56 pm
(http://img150.imageshack.us/img150/4097/lalata9.gif)

Mathias: should I take it as a compliment? xD Yes, for the most part, I'm done. Unless there's really something that sticks out at you. >:

McClaneGames: Yes, and that's what I did. <: Does it look any better?
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Gil on January 22, 2009, 05:56:31 pm
The fact that the hearts disapear in the reverse order makes it a bit obvious the whole animation loops, something to avoid in animation. I'd let the hearts disapear in the order they appeared, so let the bottom one disapear first. Alternate way would be making them pop, that'd be cute as hell :)
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Accident on January 22, 2009, 06:08:00 pm
(http://img178.imageshack.us/img178/8297/gdsgsxt3.gif)

Pop? xD I should try that. Nevertheless, until then...
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Jad on January 22, 2009, 10:58:39 pm
Ok, since we're happily nitpicking anyway, how about this:

Making the hearts float up slightly pixel-by-pixel before they pop, to make them feel a bit more 'alive' (I know they are not, but you get it) I think that would make it all feel more animated-y

Also while you're animating her, I can see she's trying to seduce us to think she's all nice, but I wanna see her eat some stolen cake! ;D

Also, really requesting more arts : D I really wanna see some more!
Title: Re: she wants to steal your desserts.
Post by: Accident on January 23, 2009, 09:03:15 pm
I'll keep this in mind, and fiddle around with it in my spare time.

But really, Jad, you're right. I'll be making more art then, perhaps one with a different pallete and such. <: