Pixelation

Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: Akira on October 24, 2008, 01:30:08 pm

Title: towing comets
Post by: Akira on October 24, 2008, 01:30:08 pm

I've been working on this for too long. I need a some new eyes to take a look. I'm not entirely sure how to render the comet. Also I am planning on re-rendering the man's face.
(http://ethan.shilocity.net/images/paintscrapz/onethirtythree.gif)

C&C

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: Elwin on October 24, 2008, 03:15:01 pm

It's an amazing piece, but the man is ruining it 100%. he's way too stiff, and doesn't belong at all in the image. try making him in a more dynamic position, and not with a totally front view face.

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: absolut_oddka on October 24, 2008, 10:39:32 pm

Wow, love the horse! This reminds me of the villain from Loom. I also like the gradual glow on the chain.
The grey area seems sparse for its size. Maybe a little low-contrast detail with your darker grey, like shadows or simple texture, could spruce it up without detracting from the bold figures.

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: Souly on October 25, 2008, 04:14:29 am

I loved it when you showed it to me on MSN.
I like the changes you've done with the chariot.

However I don't think the horse is even attached to this chariot.
The grey is a bit distracting, but I have no idea what you could do with it. :(

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: Dusty on October 25, 2008, 05:01:48 am

Is it odd that I think the best part of this piece is the chain? And I don't mean that in a bad way.

Though, I find it very hard to understand what is going on in this. I mean, I understand he is towing a comet, but what's with the gray half and everything? And even though I know you're not done with the comet, I think you're approaching it completely wrong. It looks more like clouds than gases. The tails of a comet are much more defined and clear, instead of bubbly. Think of it as a propane torch or such. They also have two tails, but you're fine with just one, I think... though two may be more dramatic if you want to take advantage of that, because they're usually two different colors.

(http://apod.nasa.gov/apod/image/comet_west.gif)

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: Akira on October 26, 2008, 03:44:57 am

An new rendering of the comet:
(http://ethan.shilocity.net/images/paintscrapz/towincomets.gif)
I'm not sure if I'm happy with it or not. It feels too small or something.
Future plans:
-redo the man's face
-increase the black area so it splits the canvas diagonally and maybe add clouds to the grey area?

This is taking a while. I've got exams to study for and junk. I wanna hang in there and see this one through to the end though.

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: skamocore on October 26, 2008, 04:08:41 am

I love this :D, and the comet is looking much better now. But as others have said, the man is kinda not right...

I know this doesn't really make much sense, but I think compositionally something like this is better:

(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v198/tumble_weed/towincomets-EDIT-1.png)

Maybe have the man actually riding the horse? As well as maybe adding some more detail to the horse, ie have the horseshoes white/light grey. Right now, I think the chariot and horse are competing too much for attention.

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: Akira on October 26, 2008, 06:28:57 am

I don't really agree with you composition wise, but I probably will add more detail to the horse. Thanks for the crits and taking the time to edit!

Latest:
(http://ethan.shilocity.net/images/paintscrapz/towinkomets.gif)
I'm happier with the guys face.

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: tocky on October 26, 2008, 08:10:41 am

dirty npa edit tyme:
(http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y13/tocky/akira-comet-driver.png)
Basically, the straightlineliness of various elements bugs me, especially the chain, the wheel on the chariot, and also the backdrop in the lastest version. ( I edited it back to be like the older version before I realised that that's what the older version was like.) The mirroredness of the horns, also.

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: Zach on October 27, 2008, 03:12:10 am

I really wish this was a painting or drawing :)
pixel art doesn't really do this very much justice IMO

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: Emtch on October 27, 2008, 06:54:35 pm

Quote from: Zach on October 27, 2008, 03:12:10 am

I really wish this was a painting or drawing :)
pixel art doesn't really do this very much justice IMO

I beg to differ. With enough work, pixel art can look just as good as traditional art.

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: Akira on November 06, 2008, 02:08:23 am

(http://ethan.shilocity.net/images/paintscrapz/towinkometz.gif)
clouds the way to go?
sorry about the lack of updates, i've been working on some stuff for a job.

Title: Re: towing comets
Post by: Sherman Gill on November 06, 2008, 03:15:45 am

All you added on the newest version is a wip-ish dust kick up? I don't know if you need it in the first place, to be honest.

Quote from: Emtch on October 27, 2008, 06:54:35 pm

I beg to differ. With enough work, pixel art can look just as good as traditional art.

I think it really depends on what you use it for. :P