Pixelation
Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: Malor on November 16, 2007, 12:45:55 am
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Finally I finished a piece. recently, I have been trying to get back into pixeling, and this may just be what I needed. Anyways.. just an avatar.. the idea was obtained during English today.
(http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b150/iceman509/Themoon-2.png)
Pro Motion used.. I am trying to break my addiction to paint..
Final Draft:
(http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b150/iceman509/Themoon-3.png)
full explanation on reply #5
For funsies I added a starry background.
(http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b150/iceman509/Themoonstars-1.png)
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The hat looks very shiny and made of plastic ...
There isn't a readable expression on the moon. Is he pissed off that the star won't turn off? If its cartoony, u really should have a readable expression, like him looky sleepy
or angry. The eyes look angy, but the lips throw the expression off.
Nice work on shading but maybe craters need highlight on the other side of the rim since that would catch the light too.
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it's a bit odd how its bottom (chin? don't know which word would make it) is incurved. maybe you could want to opt for a smoother curve there.
The "orangish" part of the hat could be a bit fatter too (doing a sort of bump), and i'd say you could have a more interesting scene if the moon was indeed staring at the star ...
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very valid points. I suppose I will do an edit... unless I lose interest in this piece. If this happens it is not because I do not value your input, it is that I am simply a very lazy person.
EDIT: I did a little edit, in response to crits here and on pixeljoint.
(http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b150/iceman509/Themoon20.png) I will probably still work on the hat. Maybe.
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huh, older one is much better handling of light and pixel technique and shows a real progress in your work.
newer edit......not so much. you say it was based on advice? that makes me worry about the guys over at pixeljoint......
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Hmm. I agree with you Adarias. Edit two coming up. It is also probably not the fault of the people giving me the advice, more it's more own misinterpretation of said advice.
Final Edit. I combined the things that I thought were good in both of the two drafts, redid some of the shading, and I am finally very happy with the result.
(http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b150/iceman509/Themoon-3.png)
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I think that was probably my advice.
I suggested that the hat was rather flat, the shape of the moon confused, the lines defining the face a bit too harsh, and the overall look in areas a tad too gritty. I could've probably done a better job of the advice with some edits and by giving more than a few lines of commentary but, since it was a finished piece in the gallery I didn't.
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I think that was probably my advice.
I suggested that the hat was rather flat, the shape of the moon confused, the lines defining the face a bit too harsh, and the overall look in areas a tad too gritty. I could've probably done a better job of the advice with some edits and by giving more than a few lines of commentary but, since it was a finished piece in the gallery I didn't.
Well, by all means do an edit now :P I still really appreciated your advice Doppleganger. I am hoping this edit touched on the things you pointed out as problem areas.