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Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: skw on September 26, 2007, 05:51:22 pm

Title: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: skw on September 26, 2007, 05:51:22 pm
Hi there, folks! Here you have my lastest finished project (started in March or April and put off until now), a small one this time. CGA again (doh!) -- 3 (sic!) out of 4 colours used. This is, in fact, the second CGA variant with a small colour hack -- as far as it goes, you can't have the black plus the yellow next to each other. Read the IBM PC/compatible systems >> CGA section at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_palettes (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_palettes) if you're interested in further explanation.

(http://jspade.republika.pl/nectarinecga.png)

. . . alternatively:
(http://jspade.republika.pl/nectarinecga2.png)

Nectarine is an Internet radio station broadcasting oldschool demoscene tunes.

C&C welcome! Thank you! BZZzt. . .
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Opacus on September 26, 2007, 05:58:50 pm
The a really doesn't appeal as an a to me. I had to look quite a time to finally see an a instead of an o.
I'd suggest using an "a" with a bow, such as in the font of this forum.
Except for that it's completely awesome and all that.

Mirre: HAH! >: D
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Mirre on September 26, 2007, 06:02:53 pm
The style is lovely. But it is a bit difficult to read it (not that a big fan of the font in other words). One problem is the T; it just looks like a gap in the text, then the I; same problem. Another is the A; it looks too similar to the C ...I actually thought both were O's at first. I would suggest making it look more like a capital A. I really like the texture on it all though, and the nectarine looks great. Also, both palettes are delicious!

EDIT: Damn, ya beat me Opacus!

There's also some more confusion to the IN part... it sort of looks as if the N is missing a leg... making it all look like NEOORVE.
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Jad on September 26, 2007, 06:04:25 pm
NECTORINE






There is the problem with the a looking like an o, and also the R having one kind of thin leg, and additionally, the I and N in nectarINe flowing together.

.. The t also needs some more light I think, And the C needs a bit of distinction, it flows together and creates and 'o' for me.

NEOORINE

@ A@

aside from being a bit hard to read, though, it's looking great. Overall presentation = Definately approved (as in I love it)

(Whoops, mirre already said it. Oh well, two people makes an opinion strongerorsomething.)
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: pkmays on September 26, 2007, 06:08:37 pm
I'd say just add some black between the lower part of the A and R. Looks lovely.
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Opacus on September 26, 2007, 06:27:40 pm
NECTORINE






There is the problem with the a looking like an o, and also the R having one kind of thin leg, and additionally, the I and N in nectarINe flowing together.

.. The t also needs some more light I think, And the C needs a bit of distinction, it flows together and creates and 'o' for me.

NEOORINE

@ A@

aside from being a bit hard to read, though, it's looking great. Overall presentation = Definately approved (as in I love it)

(Whoops, mirre already said it. Oh well, two people makes an opinion strongerorsomething.)
Mirre and me.
Hah. Tripllelized. Atleast he can't get around it now : D
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: skw on September 26, 2007, 06:32:03 pm
Whoah, thanks a lot! That's what I would call a really quick reply! I'll see what I can do with it, but---I tell you frankly---I wanted it a little hard to read ;). It will be used randomly as one of many site banners and, y'know, everyone will know what it reads.

Please don't stop C&Cing! :D
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Zenobia on September 26, 2007, 06:52:28 pm
I feel that someone at least should add in: I don't think it's hard to read at all and I actually like it this way.
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Helm on September 26, 2007, 07:19:04 pm
(http://www.locustleaves.com/nectarinecga2edit.png)

It's a very nice piece, I think you're better off with such an a though.
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Jad on September 26, 2007, 07:21:01 pm
Definately seeing 'Nedarne' now with Helm's edit.

NED, ARNE! (Means ARNE, DOWN! in swedish.)
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Rokuji on September 26, 2007, 08:54:33 pm
 :blind: i forgot there was a T there for a second.

Yeah, make that more pronounced.
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: skw on September 26, 2007, 10:40:32 pm
Fanx!

NED, ARNE! (Means ARNE, DOWN! in swedish.)
Haha, that sounds kind of ambiguous! Even because of that I'm about to leave the font as it is. . . except the unfortunate a.

(http://jspade.republika.pl/nectarcga41.png)

(http://jspade.republika.pl/nectarcga42.png)

How does it look now? Will it do the trick? ;)
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: ndchristie on September 27, 2007, 01:31:47 am
imo the T has been a pprobably from the beginning, it's just gone from necorine to necarine
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Rydin on September 27, 2007, 03:31:02 am
Just putting some more yellow around the intersection...and kinda towards the top of the "t" would do wonders for legibility.  :y: Very ace otherwise--I prefer the cyan, magenta, and yellow one to the orange, yellow, and black one.
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Jolly on September 27, 2007, 06:39:22 am
That fruit on the left looked like an O to me when I first saw it.
The first image read, onecorne. ???
Nice job though. T needs yellow, The first N looking like a V a little.

Man that still looks like an O to me.  :blind:
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: skw on September 27, 2007, 09:22:37 pm
Thankies, so here we go again:

(http://jspade.republika.pl/nectarfixedt.png)

Man that still looks like an O to me.  :blind:
Oh, no. . . no way! ;)
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: Helm on September 27, 2007, 09:45:53 pm
That reads just fine to me. Congrats.
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: ndchristie on September 27, 2007, 09:55:20 pm
yes, now it is great!

i still wouldnt mind the t being mroe defined, but right now it is defined well enough to show clearly.
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: skw on September 27, 2007, 10:42:27 pm
Yay! :) Thank you, guys! Enough, I'm posting it on the Nectarine boards! ;)
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: .TakaM on September 27, 2007, 11:12:15 pm
really nice wordart, looks very smooth especially with only 3 colours.
since all the issues have been resolved, there isn't much left to say other than good work.

Oh, and even tho this isn't one, it makes me think of ambigrams, how you've got the letters quite unique in composition, some letters seemingly connect while the T is almost part of the background, that type of stuff is done all the time with ambigrams so you will read the word one way, and not pick up(too much) on the fact that it can be flipped around
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: skw on September 28, 2007, 10:33:31 am
Honestly, this is the first time I hear about ambigrams. They're real fun to watch, thanks.

I could-a made the tea a little more defined, but that would spoil the compositional structure a bit -- as compared to e.g. the letter eye which is also kind of ill-lit.

More logos to come! ;)
Title: Re: nectarine juice, or a CGA demoscene logo
Post by: infinitegames on September 29, 2007, 02:41:04 am
I like the orange one so much. It's really, really awesome. It's so passionate and vivid.

But the 'T' is too hard to read. I know it's there, but I can't help but think it would be best if you did something even if it's small to make it easier to see.

[edit]

Actually, I think your last update might have fixed the readability issue.