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Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: Illio on April 09, 2020, 06:40:22 am

Title: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Illio on April 09, 2020, 06:40:22 am
Hello! I am a beginner pixel artist who wants to get some feedback about this piece. What do you think? How can I improve? Thank you in advance.
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: tecnologgamer on April 11, 2020, 05:28:30 pm
It's good, however you don't make dynamic light and the back of eagle it's much thin that a real one.

(https://shop.r10s.jp/military-king/cabinet/p/4952839142160_4.jpg)
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: MadByte on April 11, 2020, 06:12:14 pm
I think it is great. Not much to criticize, just small personal taste changes.
- Changing the pattern above the handle to be a bit more visible
- Changing the barrel to be more round

But it's great as it is imo.


Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Illio on April 11, 2020, 07:40:47 pm
Quote from: tecnologgamer on April 11, 2020, 05:28:30 pm
It's good, however you don't make dynamic light and the back of eagle it's much thin that a real one.

(https://shop.r10s.jp/military-king/cabinet/p/4952839142160_4.jpg)
Thank you! I will try to fix it.
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Illio on April 12, 2020, 07:24:18 am
Okay, so I followed your advice and revised my work carefully. I made the back of the gun thinner, reworked some lighting effects and even put a light source, so you can have a better idea of what is going on here. As the result, it ended up looking simplified, I guess. All in all, I prefer my early version a little bit more, because it looks more shiny and detailed. Still, thank you very much for the criticism! Looking forward to reading more responses.

(https://i.imgur.com/uTlVtgd.gif)
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: tecnologgamer on April 12, 2020, 06:16:34 pm
You work well in the frame where show Eagle back, you could large a little more from the top.
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Chonky Pixel on April 12, 2020, 10:32:16 pm
No matter which angle your gun is pointing, its surfaces are the same colour.

Have a look at this badly animated coin.

(http://pixeljoint.com/files/icons/coin__r19871878551.gif)

As it rotates, the face changes shade, becoming brighter as it gets closer to facing the light source.

Have a look at this badly drawn cube.

(https://i.imgur.com/qzrTL4h.png)

You can see the face furthest from the light source is darkest, but if you rotated it around a vertical axis it would get brighter. Try doing this to your gun. It should make it look more three dimensional and hopefully more like metal.

(But other than that it's a fine-looking gun!)
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Illio on April 13, 2020, 07:21:20 pm
Thank you all for your advice! I will try to do something about it.
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Illio on April 14, 2020, 05:05:35 am
Applied some significant changes to the picture thanks to your comments. So, what do you think?

(https://i.imgur.com/woEU0Am.gif)
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Chonky Pixel on April 14, 2020, 01:06:26 pm
Good, it looks more metal now. :)

The textured area above the handle looks like it needs to change shade with the rest of the gun as well. But I'm enjoying your progress.
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Illio on April 21, 2020, 07:59:30 am
It think this looks good as a final design, isn't it?

(https://i.imgur.com/y4QPyk6.gif)
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Mathias on April 21, 2020, 01:03:35 pm
(https://i.imgur.com/DHnd2Vw.gif)

Mainly an animation timing edit. Timing kinda sin waves to help enforce a smoother motion.
(https://i.imgur.com/m9tQGKN.png)


Did a little work on trying to help awkward highlight changes across frames, namely the jittery white highlight on bottom of grip.
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Illio on April 21, 2020, 01:38:05 pm
Quote from: Mathias on April 21, 2020, 01:03:35 pm
(https://i.imgur.com/DHnd2Vw.gif)

Mainly an animation timing edit. Timing kinda sin waves to help enforce a smoother motion.
(https://i.imgur.com/m9tQGKN.png)


Did a little work on trying to help awkward highlight changes across frames, namely the jittery white highlight on bottom of grip.

Thank you for your suggestions! But to me the gun shouldn't rotate too fast, because it becomes harder to distinguish what is what. Or, maybe, it is just me. But, really, thank you for your help!
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Mathias on April 21, 2020, 02:26:06 pm
(https://i.imgur.com/rofIBvm.gif)

Always save the last bullet for yourself.
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Illio on April 21, 2020, 05:07:12 pm
Quote from: Mathias on April 21, 2020, 02:26:06 pm
(https://i.imgur.com/rofIBvm.gif)

Always save the last bullet for yourself.

I think that the white reflection on the barrel looks a bit off. It blinks and unnecessarily catches the eye. But thanks for suggesting!
Title: Re: (WIP) Check out this Desert Eagle animation
Post by: Mathias on April 21, 2020, 05:22:11 pm
Quote from: Illio on April 21, 2020, 05:07:12 pm
Quote from: Mathias on April 21, 2020, 02:26:06 pm
(https://i.imgur.com/rofIBvm.gif)

Always save the last bullet for yourself.

I think that the white reflection on the barrel looks a bit off. It blinks and unnecessarily catches the eye. But thanks for suggesting!

Sure. One of many things I might adjust if I were to do a comprehensive edit.