Pixelation

Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: Neoriceisgood on December 11, 2006, 01:22:35 am

Title: Love
Post by: Neoriceisgood on December 11, 2006, 01:22:35 am
This piece needs no explanation, c&c welcome.

(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v158/neoriceisgood/love.gif)
Title: Re: Love
Post by: AlienQuark on December 11, 2006, 01:30:48 am
This piece needs no explanation...

I beg to differ. :-\ .
Title: Re: Love
Post by: halu on December 11, 2006, 01:38:57 am
I think maybe he loves Gorillas ????
I can't really focus on it long enough to criticize, so...
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Stwelin on December 11, 2006, 01:41:40 am
i'll critique as soon as the seizures stop.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: halu on December 11, 2006, 01:58:33 am
alright, after copying the first frame, I can sort of critique it.
the grass looks bad with the dithering, it looks very grainy, same for the moon(?).
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Rydin on December 11, 2006, 04:38:54 am
It's cool, but extremely hard to make out.  I'd say right off the bat, stick to one outline color...and maybe outline more of the arms and head to make it more defined.  Also, the dithering on the wall and the light source in the sky could use some work...they don't seem to be helping that much at the moment.
I would say that the second frame is working against you... instead of having him be in the exact pose as the first frame, maybe make the arms be at a 45 degree angle, between the pose of the first and last frame...  The definition from the first frame is definitely not carried over to the second frame, and depending on what your going for, it may be alright for the second frame to be this way, but it'd definitely be in your best interest to re-shade and re-outline the gorilla in the last frame.

This is pretty snazzy (though seizure inducing at the moment), and I think with a little work, will be tolerable to even the toughest critiques.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: big brother on December 11, 2006, 04:07:30 pm
I've seen a non color cycling version of this before. Something done in MS Paint with the default colors. Can't remember who pixelled it originally.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Neoriceisgood on December 11, 2006, 05:46:00 pm
I've seen a non color cycling version of this before. Something done in MS Paint with the default colors. Can't remember who pixelled it originally.

Try Neoriceisgood.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Larwick on December 11, 2006, 11:36:41 pm
Try Neoriceisgood.

Why did you have to post it with this horrible animation and colours?
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Neoriceisgood on December 12, 2006, 09:07:43 pm
Why did you have to post it with this horrible animation and colours?

Try to stay constructive please, obviously I have an underlying message in my piece that things can "hurt to look at" and "hurt to look at"

I am sorry if you can not appreciate the depth of my piece.

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I would say that the second frame is working against you... instead of having him be in the exact pose as the first frame, maybe make the arms be at a 45 degree angle, between the pose of the first and last frame...  The definition from the first frame is definitely not carried over to the second frame

Good idea thanks.

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but it'd definitely be in your best interest to re-shade and re-outline the gorilla in the last frame.

No need, I wrote "Gorilla" at the bottom to make it obvious what it is.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Dusty on December 12, 2006, 09:20:52 pm
I don't think you should need to label your work to make it apparent what it is. Either leave it up to interpretation to the viewer, or have the work tell itself.

And his post was constructive. I don't think it's that he can't 'appreciate' the depth of your piece, but that it's so mind-numbingly flashy that it's nearly impossible to make out without ripping out one frame. If you're trying to give an underlying message that it hurts to look at, then do so with the art itself, not by bright eye-sore colours flashing rapidly at a seizure inducing level.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Rydin on December 12, 2006, 09:22:53 pm
No need, I wrote "Gorilla" at the bottom to make it obvious what it is.

Good point.  It actually brings up an interesting topic....sorta the whole "this is not a pipe" thing.

But please try not to be so defensive--you've got to take what other say here with a grain of salt. Pixelation is a critique forum, and you said with your post that comments and critiques are welcome.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: MoD on December 12, 2006, 09:25:51 pm
OMG, Dusty completely paraphrased the post I was trying to make before I finished typing it. Aww man.

I suggest you post a frame of it with still colors so we can easily evaluate the technique and style before moving on to the deeper conveyances.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Neoriceisgood on December 12, 2006, 09:42:44 pm
I guess it's true that sarcasm doesn't work on the internet, sorry.  :-*
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Akzidenz on December 12, 2006, 09:45:40 pm
I guess it's true that sarcasm doesn't work on the internet, sorry.  :-*

I kind of figured you weren't serious when you said:

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I have an underlying message in my piece that things can "hurt to look at" and "hurt to look at"

On a more serious note - as serious as this can get, anyways - I think you could make it more irritating. Random flashes of white inbetween the frames would be pretty awful.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Neoriceisgood on December 12, 2006, 09:49:10 pm
That would be a good idea perhaps, but, what if the random flashes had really small text in them?
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Akzidenz on December 12, 2006, 09:51:48 pm
Better yet, really small flashes of text that look to say something but in reality are totally unintelligible.

EDIT: And maybe you could flip "Gorilla!" around so that it's backwards.
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Zolthorg on December 13, 2006, 04:16:23 am
Work on those ssbm character sprites!
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Checkworth on December 13, 2006, 04:30:14 am
I find this delightful  ;D It needs, in fact, no explanation.

*laud*
Title: Re: Love
Post by: Rox on December 13, 2006, 11:59:07 am
You want critique? Stop doing this, is my critique! I honestly don't see the point in it. Well, I do, but I don't see the point in asking for c&c on something like this. What was your intention with this piece?

But I will admit the sun fascinates me.
Title: Sprites
Post by: Neoriceisgood on December 13, 2006, 03:05:28 pm
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What was your intention with this piece?

If you want the actual reason, this is actually a relatively old piece (don't hit me) I made for one of the boards that appeared after pixelation died, I forgot it's name; however it was sort of elitist;

If your art wasn't up to a certain "quality" a.k.a "hurts to look at" it would get  "swamped" which means I got placed in "the swamp" which generaly meant the mods didn't find you skilled enough;

With an "elitist" (there were good reasons behind it, really.) approach to posters like that, It was obvious I had to make a piece  that could survive the swamp, yet hurting to look at at the same time;

And it didn't get swamped, which means it was succesfull;

I just ran into it when browsing through my photobucket, and decided it was awesome enough to share with the people who hadn't seen it during it's days of glory.

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Now to give this topic more meaning, here's something I've been working on that -could- actually use c&c

(http://img178.imageshack.us/img178/9530/yourfaceonaplatecg7.png)

The leftmost Frogatto (green guy) was my first sprite ever :'D I'm still amazed I managed to save that all these years.

a few words: I reduced most of them to 16 colours; the old guy has around 25 colours in the picture uploaded, however the one saved on my computer right now has 16 colours, so that's not really anything that requires mentioning anymore.

Critism should only be about the 5 guys on top, because obviously the bottom two rows aren't sprites I plan to uhh. . "fix"


Hopefully this makes my topic more meaningfull
Title: Re: Love
Post by: baccaman21 on December 13, 2006, 05:48:30 pm
bizarre motives... how peculiar... I find you MO rather puzzling... you can obviously pixel - so why the subtifuge...

interesting sprites in the end... but i'm not gonna comment on them specifically here... I might set up another thread elsewhere with some odd color cycling bizarro thing wait a few days... then do some c7c on this thread... linking back to it obviously...

just to keep you on your toes...

<utterly confused...>

over and out...