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Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: Snow Fenrir on July 18, 2014, 08:30:24 pm

Title: [WIP] Dragonfall
Post by: Snow Fenrir on July 18, 2014, 08:30:24 pm
(http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2014/199/f/c/dragonfall_by_inframundo-d7r6f1v.png)

Scene of the revelation book that is shown as a game over screen.

I am having a lot of trouble with the dragon's foreclaws so far it looks like its asking the light to stop his fall but he is supposed to be swiping at it instead hm.

(http://i.imgur.com/LSnY6t8.png)

small edit

(http://i.imgur.com/uMbR2xD.png)

(http://i.imgur.com/9iMr5J5.png)
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Title: Re: [WIP] Dragonfall
Post by: Drazelic on July 19, 2014, 02:32:12 am
Mmm... are you sure you're not being a bit overambitious here with that huge canvas?

In any case, that sort of stippling-technique you're using with individual brush clicks in the background probably isn't going to get you anywhere, if you keep paint-overing it over and over :V

As for the dragon... I'd be hard-pressed to think of a swiping technique that involves doing a mid-air barrel roll and exposing your vulnerable underbelly to the thing you're swiping at. If you're trying to express dynamic motion in the composition, perhaps you could reconsider the dragon's design entirely.
Title: Re: [WIP] Dragonfall
Post by: Snow Fenrir on July 19, 2014, 09:30:20 am
Mmm... are you sure you're not being a bit overambitious here with that huge canvas?

In any case, that sort of stippling-technique you're using with individual brush clicks in the background probably isn't going to get you anywhere, if you keep paint-overing it over and over :V

As for the dragon... I'd be hard-pressed to think of a swiping technique that involves doing a mid-air barrel roll and exposing your vulnerable underbelly to the thing you're swiping at. If you're trying to express dynamic motion in the composition, perhaps you could reconsider the dragon's design entirely.

I worded my thoughts poorly the dragon is not swiping at the light per se but he should not look like he was asking it for help as it fell from heaven like in the original pic.
Title: Re: [WIP] Dragonfall
Post by: jahasaja on July 19, 2014, 10:53:38 am
Cool Picture!

I think the main problem is the head. Now he just looks helpless. By just rotating the head it already looks more like he is out to get the light

(http://www.skadedjursbekampning.nu/uploads/headchange1.gif)

I think if you also change the mouth to more aggressive and the left claw like he is building up for the swipe (I tried a little bit in my edit)  will look more like what you are aiming for.
Title: Re: [WIP] Dragonfall
Post by: Storyteller on July 19, 2014, 06:59:24 pm
I think go the other way, make his body more stretched and arched backward, like he is stricken. Think of a pose where you get hit in the middle of the back. Over-exaggerate his agony.
Title: Re: [WIP] Dragonfall
Post by: Snow Fenrir on July 19, 2014, 09:04:16 pm
(http://i.imgur.com/9iMr5J5.png)

I agree it looks way better with the neck arched backwards in agony.