Pixelation
Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: Javy on July 29, 2006, 03:44:43 pm
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(http://img109.imageshack.us/img109/6686/stalingradprogressms4.gif)
Progress(I lost it)
(http://img124.imageshack.us/img124/372/blahay8.png)
(a bit after)
(http://img109.imageshack.us/img109/7871/stalin2ru3.png)
(Inserted some of the crits not done yet still)
Not done yet because
1)It doesn't look war torn enough :p
2)I can't AA for crap
3)It looks empty...
4)that thing on the bottom right is supposed to be a Shelling crater
Comments?
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Fire, or the effects thereof. Especially on the wood frames you've got there.
Shrapnel.
Bullet pock-marks in the walls.
Half-buried-in-the-snow weapons?
Yarr.
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Your bricks are too perfectly broken. What are the chances that all the bricks would cleanly break along the ..uh.. mortar lines (?... sorry for the terminology... not a mason)... like that? They should be ragged, imo. Also, everything is pretty clean, at the moment. The snow is pristine, white, the bricks are clean, the frames (despite being broken) look to be in perfect condition, etc. Throw in some debris, crack up those walls more... things like that.
(http://h1.ripway.com/tremulant/Non%20pixel/london09.jpg)
A bit of reference for a shelled building. Note the ragged way in which the bricks have broken away, the sheer amount of debris...
As for the shelling crater, it should, for starters, not still be white. chances are that a shells would blow straight throuigh to the street, unless you have, like, 20 feet of snow there, and even then, it would burrow through the snow and blow it all away/melt it when it exploded.
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I fixed it up a bit, I still haven't fixed the crater yet(I have no reference) I'm working on it though.