Pixelation
Critique => Pixel Art => Pixel Art Feature Chest => Topic started by: Juninho on November 28, 2012, 07:31:12 pm
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I'm making that for a game I doing with a friend , That is just the sketch I made .
(http://i.imgur.com/cr6Qq.png)
C+C are good !!
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I think C+C would be more useful once you clean this up and formalize the pixel clusters more. In addition, in this stage this isn't quite "pixel art" per se, it falls more into the category of oekaki. I suggest you work on defining the forms more and then present a more critiquable picture. In addition, might I ask, why so large of a canvas? Does it need to be this size? If so, why specifically are you going with pixel art as a medium?
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Big pieces need DETAILS and lots of COLORS! pixel art does not have auto-gradients and stuff like that to make everything look smooth, so you have to add these details ^^.
First of all, the mountains should go more blue as they fade into the background.
for the clouds try simple shapes at first and refine it :D
I dont have much more to say, I think the image speaks for itself :P
(http://oi48.tinypic.com/2eeiw6a.jpg)
(http://i46.tinypic.com/24owms1.png)
(http://i50.tinypic.com/j5kmtw.png)
and make sure they are panoramic :p (TERRIBLE EDIT!!!)
(http://i46.tinypic.com/m1qah.png)
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Big pieces need DETAILS and lots of COLORS!
(unless they're used as background layers for some interactive experience, imvho)
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(message edited, I thought philippejugnet was the OP) :
Hello Juninho.
Don't go into details before thinking more about the composition.
You made a boring picture, and you need to understand why :
- All your montains are exactly the same height
- All your montains have the same shape and angle
- Basically you're filling the space with perfectly regular shapes. There is no point that can draw the attention in your image. We don't know where to look.
- Where are the rocks, the trees, the snow ? You need to figure out where the rocky places are, where the forest are, where the snow is, all of this using color variations.
- The fog must be progressive. Fade the mountains in the middle.
- No foreground elements ? Or no humans on the mountains ? There is no sense of scale here. You need to put some elements we can use to figure out the scale of the panorama. Any element. A village, a tree, a group of human, otherwise we can't imagine how big it is.
A simple edit using philippejugnet's base just to show some work on composition, I didn't care about details or palette.
Of course the foreground thing doesn't apply at all if you were just willing to make a background for the game. I would actually
add more fog to make the foreground where you play pop more and make the game easier to read.
After
(http://i.imgur.com/qbE5M.gif)
Before After
(http://i.imgur.com/EUsZ0.gif)
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Another piece you won't ever finish I guess.
Too bad you clearly have some intuiton and talent, but you need a better workflow.
As usual, you went directly into details before thinking about the composition.
So congratulations ! You made another boring picture.
I have a very bad feeling that this was directed towards Phillipe... If so, keep in mind that he is not the OP, and was just giving some C+C to the OP. I'm not quite sure that was a fair thing to say to Phillipe regardless.
- No foreground elements ? No humans ? There is no sense of scale here. You need to put some elements
we can use to figure out the scale of the panorama. Otherwise we can't imagine how big it is.
A simple edit (with a very stupid fisherman) just to show some work on composition, I didn't care about details or palette.
Well, I personally thought the OP was going for something that was more of a background for a scene that would be layered on top (maybe a platformer or something?), though that inference could be wrong. I completely agree with all of your other points, though. I guess we'll have to see if OP returns with an edit to see what advances he's made based on the C+C.
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tim, I suppose your post is directed at philippejugnet? Did you notice this is not his thread? Not saying that criticizing edits is a bad thing, but the focus should probably be on the main piece.
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Oh god, I'm too tired these days.
You are right and I'm totally wrong, I was absolutely sure philippejugnet was the OP.
I will edit my original message.
(done. also edited the picture with three steps instead of two.)
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And in the case it was philippejugnet's thread, keep in mind that the quoted message would have earned you a strike. The first rule of Pixelation is to not be an ass. If you - or anyone - do not like philippe's propensity to not finish his pieces, feel free to not give him critique. There will be no more of this bullying.
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I understand, and you are right, the original message was too agressive.
I hope my critique & edit will be useful despite my behavior.
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thank you a lot guys , your edits and criticisms are great .
I tried to make more forms on the mountains .
(http://i.imgur.com/2zMe2.png)
I will edit that after , but I post how it is going for you see if it is going good .
And the resolution is that , I can't do in other proportions
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And in the case it was philippejugnet's thread, keep in mind that the quoted message would have earned you a strike. The first rule of Pixelation is to not be an ass. If you - or anyone - do not like philippe's propensity to not finish his pieces, feel free to not give him critique. There will be no more of this bullying.
not posting is not a synonym of not finishing, and giving advice and critique should help the artist or the piece be better?
cant believe I am leaving another community because of this-tha doesnt mean I am not gonna finish my secret santa piece-
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the overlapping wasnt really well done, they look flat, try to do as I showed you in my edit.
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You're newest edit is definitely a step in the right direction. Right now, I think your biggest problem is the the mountains are too triangular. Take a look at Tim's edit. the mountains in the back are not triangular, they go up in more of a trapezoid shape and are flat with multiple peaks. Use a reference if you haven't, I think it would help out a lot. I think this could be useful to you
(http://cdn.thenextweb.com/wp-content/blogs.dir/1/files/2012/10/swiss-mountain-via-comstock-645x250.jpg)
but there are probably better ones out there, I only looked for a minute or so. Personally I would avoid using the spikes on the mountain just because they would be distracting in game.
I edited the front two mountains, but it's probably not worth much because you have other edits that would demonstrate it better.
(http://i520.photobucket.com/albums/w328/adcrusher/mountainedit.png)
I don't know why it's AA'd like that photobucket is messed it up or something..
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thank you guys !
I was seeing your edits , and I made a new update
(http://i.imgur.com/sFIxC.png)
I have to work a lot of on clouds :'(
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And in the case it was philippejugnet's thread, keep in mind that the quoted message would have earned you a strike. The first rule of Pixelation is to not be an ass. If you - or anyone - do not like philippe's propensity to not finish his pieces, feel free to not give him critique. There will be no more of this bullying.
not posting is not a synonym of not finishing, and giving advice and critique should help the artist or the piece be better?
cant believe I am leaving another community because of this-tha doesnt mean I am not gonna finish my secret santa piece-
No no don't worry Philippe, he was talking to me, not you.
In my original message, I thought you were the author, and I was mindlessly agressive against you, thinking you started another thread for another unfinished artwork.
Helm was warning me for my behavior, not you, don't worry. Actually, thanks for your edit, it was a great base for my own edit.
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hey guys , sorry for that long time without replying that thread . I was making the remaining sprites of the game , but now I can return to that landscape