Pixelation

Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: brod on October 16, 2010, 04:18:11 am

Title: Portrait
Post by: brod on October 16, 2010, 04:18:11 am
So.. I'm trying to get back into the swing of pixeling things.. and so I tried to make a self-portrait.

(http://www.pixeljoint.com/files/icons/portrait__r1995119391.png)v1

(http://i51.tinypic.com/1416ys7.png)v2

(http://i51.tinypic.com/15oxkrl.png)v3

(http://i53.tinypic.com/256cmci.png)v4

(http://i53.tinypic.com/111t4dd.png)v5

I'd like some C&C to help improve myself, please. (I don't want to shade the hair.. too annoying >_<)
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: dpixel on October 16, 2010, 06:01:01 am
Its' really hard to determine a light source.  I'd go for more contrast on the face with a more definitive shadows after determining a light source.  If nothing else shade the eye sockets and around the nose and neck. Don't be afraid of a more contrasting color.
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: DtFM on October 16, 2010, 10:08:02 am
I think the acne should be a bit pinker and the black mouth line should be thinner.
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: brod on October 16, 2010, 12:06:10 pm
@dpixel: Ok, I'll give it a shot.
@DtFM: I'll try to fix the mouth, but those aren't acne, they're freckles. :S


So is this better?
(http://i51.tinypic.com/1416ys7.png)
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: DtFM on October 16, 2010, 01:27:02 pm
I'll let someone else comment on the shading, but I'll mention that the anti-aliasing shouldn't be grey. I made a quick edit:

(http://img706.imageshack.us/img706/1996/1416ys7editdtfm.png)
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: McClaneGames on October 16, 2010, 11:08:27 pm
(http://i.imgur.com/0T7O9.png)
Edited you're AA.
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: EvilEye on October 17, 2010, 06:52:26 am
Not really sure what style you're going for so it's hard to comment too much. But I can definitely say the mouth needs to be moved up maybe 1-2 pixels and to the right 1 pixel. The eyes look pretty amateurish, you should never draw the full oval shape, instead make the top and bottom eyelashes and pupils, leave the rest for the viewer to create with negative space.
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: brod on October 17, 2010, 04:10:31 pm
There's no style I'm trying to go by, I'm just.. trying to draw a face >_<

So... improvement?
(http://i51.tinypic.com/15oxkrl.png)
(I temporarily took out the freckles, got annoying :/)

Another update..
(http://i53.tinypic.com/256cmci.png)
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: EvilEye on October 18, 2010, 10:29:17 pm
The last one looks fine, but I recommend outlining the top of the nose as opposed to the side.
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: brod on October 18, 2010, 11:55:42 pm
Fixed and re-added some stuff

(http://i53.tinypic.com/111t4dd.png)
Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: Josiah on October 20, 2010, 05:18:25 am
I think you should bring the ear down a little bit more, also the eyes look off balanced, the nose seems to jut towards the side of the face a bit too much.

There's my input for ya, keep up the good work  :y:


Title: Re: Portrait
Post by: DtFM on October 20, 2010, 10:00:16 am
I think the bottom of the nose should be outlined.