Pixelation
Critique => Pixel Art => Topic started by: SplatPixel on March 25, 2006, 08:23:23 am
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nevermind, just trying a simple style. looks like shit.
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i think you should change the short shorts to makeitlooklikeshes wearing clothes..its really tight and doesnt look like glothes much.
also i think youshould make it visable that there is a chin under that collar
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mixed feelings about this, i really like the colours and shading.. but the line arts style doesnt seem to flow.
with a smaller head and slimmer hips this could be a really graceful looking pixelart.
but if you really want to keep those proportions the main thing that sticks out for me is the face, it looks a little too big on the head and kinda plain. other than that this is awesome :)
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infact I did a really quick edit in mspaint to show what i meant:
(http://img91.imageshack.us/img91/4733/somethinglike7db.png)
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The anatomy here is rather wonky. I looked at it and involuntarily said "huh?" out loud. I don't claim to be an anatomy expert, but I've been trying to improve my knowledge in this area lately, so I'm going to list what I see so far.
1. The (our) left hip is way to pointy, as well as coming down from a weird angle. It looks like it's attached to someone standing next to her.
2. The legs are a bit too far apart at the crotch, maybe half that width, or even make them just barely touching.
3. Her breasts may be a bit too high.
4. The lines coming out from the crotch (not sure what they're called) should probably be tilted down a bit and go a bit closer to the outer edge. Remember the female pelvis is low and wide.
5. Knees also look a bit low, though this would be better solved by lengthening the lower legs.
6. The feet are just wedges, check out the actualy structure of a foot and she'll look a lot more graceful.
7. She's got no ribcage, her chest should start widening a tad around where the elbows would be on arms at rest.
8. The legs are a tiny bit too thick for the rest of her, or maybe the rest of her is a bit too thin.
9. With her hand on her hip that way, her legs would naturally somewhat point in a similar direction as the hand on the hips, and the upper body would lean over the hand on the hip. She looks a bit stiff at the moment.
That's pretty much everything I noticed so far, I hope you can put it to some good use.
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Tis a cute one it is... but why the dithering? It seems rather out of place. The deformed style reminds me alot of ff9; though you might consider increasing the hand size or the entire body's thickness to help balance out the image, its a bit top-heavy o.0u The gap in her pelvic region also seems a bit large as well. Aside from that I must say the folds are rather nicely done.
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no need to remove the image, we're just trying to help you improve some aspects of it
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4. The lines coming out from the crotch (not sure what they're called)
Part of the hip flexors... ;)
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Oh come on, it was better than anything I could do at that size. ;D
But don't listen to me, heh. I'm just wondering if you just got discouraged or something (which happens to me all the time). I find it's best to just leave it there, so later, there's an inkling of a chance I might improve it later if I ever decide to go searching for it.
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nevermind, just trying a simple style. looks like shit.
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¿? deleted? Why? i not understand.....
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Dood, put it back.
Please?
Just take all teh crits into account and fix it up.
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yeah dude, put it back up. critique is what this forum is made for. :-\
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It was far from shit my friend. It had a few issues sure, but it certainly was not shit.
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he's got a complicated style, I think he was trying to simplify it, and he belived it failed, so he took it down.
I can relate to that :p
is that right splat?
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I don't remember you being this sensitive man, did you hit your head or something?
I never even got to look at the original :(
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I thought it was prety good. Needed some fix ups, but nothing ot major.
~If he doesn't wanna show it I don't see the point in pressuring him to. It might not nessisarly be because of the comments people gave. Maybe he just wasn't satisfied with it and decided to remove it.