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Ninja Idle Critique Wanted please !

on: April 03, 2017, 04:09:58 am
I would really appreciate if anyone could critique this animation. I feel like i could make the animation a little more lively since this is supposed to go in a fighting game. thanks and feel free to change up the animation in anyway you want!


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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted !

Reply #1 on: April 03, 2017, 04:10:38 am
ignore this =)
« Last Edit: April 05, 2017, 08:37:06 pm by coconutcricket »
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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted !

Reply #2 on: April 03, 2017, 04:22:10 am
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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted !

Reply #3 on: April 03, 2017, 05:07:18 am
Upload it to an image hosting site and use the direct URL in between the image tags. You've linked us to the file on your local machine, which we have no access to.

Find an image hosting site (imgur, google drive, amazon s3, photobucket, imageshack, etc) and upload your image, then get the direct url (right click > copy imgae link) and put it in between the image tags.

see here for more info (http://pixelation.org/pixelation/index.php?topic=3466.0)

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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted !

Reply #4 on: April 03, 2017, 11:18:50 am
thanks yaoman it wasnt working from my google drive but through imgur it worked. much love
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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted please !

Reply #5 on: April 05, 2017, 08:10:03 pm
bump. if anyone could help I would greatly appreciate it. ive seen the animations on this site and everyone seems to know a lot more than me
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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted please !

Reply #6 on: April 05, 2017, 08:45:38 pm
Start a new layer and go over each frame again, try to keep lines steadier and correct movement gaffes like the twitchy feet.

Instead of relying on us, try to train yourself to spot some flaws then run it by folks!
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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted please !

Reply #7 on: April 06, 2017, 01:49:18 am
Edit: i tried overall cleaning up the animation especially the legs


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i was considering adding a clenching fist animation to it but I couldnt get it right...
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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted please !

Reply #8 on: April 06, 2017, 01:52:26 am
Still too rough! Your proportions and linework are jumping all over the place, try to keep lines rigid and curves stable!
And you still gotta work on stabilizing those feet, feet don't tend to wiggle like that!
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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted please !

Reply #9 on: April 06, 2017, 02:39:11 am
How does this one look, I tried reducing foot wiggle like you said and cleaned up the legs

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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted please !

Reply #10 on: April 06, 2017, 03:01:28 am
Your feet are still twitching on one frame. Fix that and you'll be much closer to fixing your issues.

I'd remove the blinking but that's just a small nitpick.

When Mystery says your lines are twitching and bouncing all over the place, Mystery is talking about for example, the belt and bottom back of the skull. The belt seems to be jumping up and down and the shape of the bottom back of the skull is changing shape throughout the animation. Also, the black pixels on the front of the bandana move on a frame.

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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted please !

Reply #11 on: April 06, 2017, 04:34:28 am
Your feet are still twitching on one frame. Fix that and you'll be much closer to fixing your issues.

I'd remove the blinking but that's just a small nitpick.

When Mystery says your lines are twitching and bouncing all over the place, Mystery is talking about for example, the belt and bottom back of the skull. The belt seems to be jumping up and down and the shape of the bottom back of the skull is changing shape throughout the animation. Also, the black pixels on the front of the bandana move on a frame.

thanks alot for the advice guys also i kinda wanted the animation to feel bouncy so I kept the belt  bounce but i made all the other changes you said. I also slowed it down a frame

                                               
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Re: Ninja Idle Critique Wanted please !

Reply #12 on: April 06, 2017, 04:42:23 am
Good improvements. I think the big problem here might be a lack of practice, try doing some excercises.

Bouncing balls of various force and speeds (from superball wall-smacks to standard up and down bouncing) and wiggly lines and the like.
Squash and stretch is something that takes a while to get down and it's usually something you want to play with after you get solid figures down more, your anatomy is a bit off which I think is what's getting me here most. IE, his shoulder retreating into his torso on the left, or the neck deforming the bottom of his head like that.
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