RPG Logo Help

[secretcat]

Hi 

I'm working on a fairy tale based RPG and got some great help here a little while ago with my portraits. I have been working on a logo to use and would like some feedback. In case you are wondering the game is a turn based RPG with roguelike elements.

Here is what I have so far:



I'm happy with how Red looks and the font, but I'm really struggling with something to bring the darker side to it. I tried putting the shadow of a stalking wolf behind her, but my version just looked cheap. In this one I tried playing around with the font, but as you can see it does not look menacing.

I would really appreciate some feedback on how you think I could add that bit of "menacing" to this logo.

Thanks

[eishiya]

The text is very hard to read, and it'll be hard to read against anything but a solid light colour. The teeth and eyes in the text feel a little silly and create distracting contrast, hurting legibility further.  Maybe have the text be light-coloured, and have a dark shape of the wolf and other creepy things as the background for the text. That will allow the logo to be legible on any background, as well as give you something menacing to work with.

[secretcat]

Thanks for the reply! I definitely agree that the text is a bit hard to read. I had been playing around with background colours to keep the mood but improve legibility, I don't know why I didn't just change the text colour.....

Do you mean having silhouettes of the creepy things that are covered by the text?

[eishiya]

Correct. Behind the text should be solid, but you can do a lot with the surroundings. The whole thing could have the shape of a wolf, for example.

[MysteryMeat]

Another thing is to work on the positioning and composition. Look up the rule of thirds, it's pretty basic  but helps immensely with preventing awkward composition.

[secretcat]

Thanks, I will look at that as well

[secretcat]

I've tried to make some improvements based off the feedback, I decided to keep the writing clear to keep it legible. Thoughts?

[MysteryMeat]

This is looking MUCH better. Will there be a background on this? or a border, perhaps?

[secretcat]

Thanks!

I'm not sure what to do with the background, as I don't want to make it too busy. A border might be a good idea though, do you have any ideas what might go well?

[MysteryMeat]

I'd say some subtle silhouettes of trees and bushes might do it, let me do a quick mockup:


I also tweaked the shape of red's cloak and broke up the monotony on the grass platform, as well as cropped the image to the big bad wolf wasn't leading into nowhere!