AuthorTopic: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene  (Read 4368 times)

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(Sorry for the small image size; first time doing this so yeah)

Criticism would be greatly appreciated. Thanks.

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Re: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene

Reply #1 on: February 27, 2017, 10:15:11 am
Proportions!
Her arms and legs both have different lengths!
Her leftmost arm has too long a forearm compared to her upper arm, and her left leg is almost 2/3 the size of her bent right leg!

Try doing the pose you want in the mirror or find a comparable one on google to work from!
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http://pixelation.org/index.php?topic=19838.0 also go suggest on my quest, cmon
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Re: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene

Reply #2 on: February 27, 2017, 07:22:41 pm


Changelog:
-lengthened right arm
-made left arm less bloated, moved hand further mid thigh
-added minimal eye whites
-added dark highlights in hair
-jeans dark highlights recolored, added highlights at knees
-extended left side leg, adjusted foot to slightly more natural position
-faded and recolored both shoes, feet more clearly defined
-de-grayed both arms a bit
-Very slightly changed color of bewbs and the shading beneath them
-removed/lightened a couple of pixels around her shoulders, rightward arm
sticks out more now
- her leftwards arm now has indication for elbow pit, separation between
forearm and upper arm

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Re: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene

Reply #3 on: February 27, 2017, 07:41:41 pm
you've really not fixed most of what I was trying to point out! Here, I've done an overlay gif so you can see what I mean:


Both parts of the arm should be roughly equal to one another. Wrist-to-elbow should be proportionally EQUAL to elbow-to-shoulder.
This also applies to legs.

And on top of that, legs AND arms should both be about the same length as each other!

your neck is also too long and your chosen pose doesn't really allow for the leftmost leg to exist as it does with the right leg bent as it is, so you'd have to either bend that leg too into a slight squat or do what I did here on the redline sketch and push it outwards some to compensate.

Try to work on those proportions!
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http://pixelation.org/index.php?topic=19838.0 also go suggest on my quest, cmon
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Re: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene

Reply #4 on: February 27, 2017, 07:47:39 pm
Yeah, thank you for the criticism, I'll adjust and upload it in a bit.

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Re: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene

Reply #5 on: February 27, 2017, 08:29:16 pm


Used your suggestion to redo the pose, thank you for staying with me this far! Any other critiques?

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Re: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene

Reply #6 on: February 27, 2017, 08:59:47 pm
Neck's still too long!

Moving off that though, she doesn't have a shadow. And what's with the lines on the floor? what are those there to represent?
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Re: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene

Reply #7 on: February 27, 2017, 10:10:51 pm
There's a shadow there, although you might have meant it's inaccurate? Additionally, the lines on the floor are just aesthetic marks in a color that would make it feel more 'cyberpunk', they don't mean anything but they just add some extra small floor detail.

About the neck though, should I remove that one pixel or should I move the head downwards one more time, eliminating every trace?

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Re: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene

Reply #8 on: February 27, 2017, 11:15:25 pm
Move the head downwards 2 pixels, necks aren't very long! A good way I use to eyeball it is that the chin should be level to or within a half-inch of the top-back ridge of the shoulders. If you look, you can see that in these stock photos:


Granted, the woman there is about an inch longer, but most times people seem to follow that.

As for the shadow, I didn't even see that! It's barely a shadow and doesn't obey the light source, try making it MUCH darker and be sure to take into account the neon lighting of the background!
 As it is, it's lighter than the floor it's being cast on!
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Re: First Pixel Art - Here's a Cheeky Cyberpunk Street Scene

Reply #9 on: February 28, 2017, 12:48:17 am
Will uploaded fixed version in a few hours (busy), thanks for telling me all this so far, it's helped a bunch.